Concise Language Adds Punch to a Resume

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Concise Language Adds Punch to a Resume
Interviewers quickly scan a resume in about 40 seconds to learn about a job candidate's skills,accomplishments,and attributes.Because interviewers spend such a short time reading resumes,the writing must be direct and simple.Victor,a recent college graduate,is applying for a job and has written the following sentences in his résumé to describe his accomplishments.
I was a receptionist at a doctor's family medical practice.
My work included taking appointments,filing charts,answering phones,and running errands.
I was a sales person at a hardware store where I worked with selling windows,doors,tools and other customer service.
I eventually became a manager at the hardware store,ordering products and supplies,as well as supervised five employees.
I spent two summers working at the university's admission office,showing prospective students the campus and answering phones and other clerical duties.
I was a summer camp counselor with kids that have special needs.My responsibilities included handling special activities and providing daily assistance to kids as needed.
Required:
Rewrite Victor's work experience section of his résumé so that it is more effective.

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Definitions:

Placenta

is an organ that develops in the uterus during pregnancy, providing oxygen and nutrients to the growing baby and removing waste products from the baby's blood.

Doula

An experienced mentor who furnishes emotional support and information for a woman during labor.

Emotional Support

Assistance provided through empathy, concern, and understanding to help individuals cope with stress or emotional distress.

Labor

The physical or mental effort expended in the production of goods and services, or the workforce collectively involved in this process.